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All Comments on 'Whatever Mona Wants'

by PaulBFun

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
weak, very weak

while you have a commendable imagination, you can't write. get some help with that and try again.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
I agree. Poorly written.

Difficult to enjoy the story when so many words are spelled wrong or misused. Get a good editor. Your ideas are intriguing, but your execution is lousy.

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