All Comments on 'When We Were Younger'

I think you should tag this differently. In a romance a few loving and caring moments are to be expected. Some character development if you really want to make an effort. This is a case of pretty straight erotic coupling. Also, you promised two viewpoints but to me (as a female) I felt Jerri was thinking and perhaps even acting more like a man than a woman. Mind you, women can go for plain old sex too and be aggressive about it. But always with a dose of femininity. I think you need to work on that. Also, as a reader, I like some sort of closure at the end. Something that will tell us how the couple will end up. And call me old fashioned, but the way her parents talked about her when she got home, no. Just no. Meant for her ears or not. Just no.

Very good first story. Normally I don't read the first person type stories, especially when they flip the characters that are speaking. Yours kept me reading and was well done. Thank you, I hope to read more from you.