All Comments on 'When Worlds Collide Ch. 05'

Love this chapter can't wait for more, soon please!!!

oooh the excitement all that testosterone flying about !

i sure hope jared doesn't get challenged and if it's so, he damn well win that battle.

next chapter please?

Hey Jazz fab chapter hun

Can't wait for the next can we have 2 this week pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeee.

Take Care

Sol (groupie) xxxxxxxxxxxx

You are lovely... well, you must be to write such wonderful stories! I'm ready for the next instalment NOW, but I shall try to contain my impatience and wait in a properly restrained and demure manner.... lol!

I'm always surprised when I get to the end of your chapters. I didn't even notice clicking on the next page. I was completely engrossed and enthralled and I am completely enamored with your characters. Cannot wait for more!!!

Every time I think you can get no better, you surprise me again. I will cry so hard if Jared gets challenged and killed but I know if it happens you will have a good reason. As always I will be checking daily for my Jaz fix of a new chapter. I seriously think you should think about publishing some of your work for money - you could easily turn all of these stories into a book that would jump off the shelves

Kate

Please, please, please don't kill Jared. We, your loyal and loving readers, couldn't bear it if he died and left Millie alone. How can we stop you? What dire threats can we make? <pondering>

The worst thing I can think of is that we would stop reading your stories but (dang) that won't work 'cause we won't ever stop. <more pondering>

HA! I've got it.

JazCullen, if you kill Jared, we will be EVER so cross with you! ~ella

You just keep rolling them out!

After a long day with a promise of longer tomorrows. I check for new posts and am treated to a new chapter from you! Real hardship is coming in WWC, their growth will be paid for in grief and blood. I cringe thinking about any one of these characters dying, but the story must evolve. Aaron and Jen are a delight. Jared's story had depth and complexity. I get books and read them cover to cover in a day or two. I look forward to picking up a Jaz novel and turning the pages one day.

You number on fan (self-proclaimed),

Shell :-)

like it alot can't wait to find out what happens next

Love it! More, please!

an absolute delight. Except for the part of having to wait for the next chapter :(

I'm with the others, please don't kill Jared off ... too sad. Make it a challenge, a close call, a near death, almost but not quite there experience. Anything other than taking him away from Millie.

Otherwise we are as ever waiting on the pleasure of your next installment.

Nuff said.

asalways cant wait til the next chapter

but like the others i really dont want to lose jared, actually i dont think i want to lose any of them :) you have mademe love them all too much!!

I agree with the others' comments..just life threathening but don't kill anyone....please..

I love all the characters. I dont want to lose a single one of them. Please dont take Jared out. He is the perfect Alpha.

Why would you torture us with these wonderflly SHORT chapters!!!?? Only 3 pages!? WHY? WHY? WHY? Don't be mean. Either write quicker or MORE!!!! PLEASE!!!!

Just found your stories and caught up with now.

While I too would like longer chapters published hourly, don't let our begging for more sooner get you down, it is just how this bunch tend to show appreciation.

As to the story, many stories end up getting mystical (no offence to those authors, I enjoy them too) so it is good to have a down-to-earth were story. Please don't ever abandon this world or this pack.

Keep writing,

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-ShadowedDreams

I am a big fan of you work and can't wait to read it all...Thank you for such great insight of characters...

What can I say, I'm hooked

Love your stories

Keep up the good work

... to find new things to say about how good your writing is, LOL.

Seriously, I've read thousands and thousands of romance novels and review them for magazines and with a little bit of editing, you could definitely be a published author. You are THAT good! Your character development is great and you keep a good balance between action, romance, and easy banter.

Check your uses of passed versus past.

FTA TA and this are all good enough to be published! I can't wait to read your other submissions but I'm sure there 'publishable' too!!!

The only slight criticism I have is about Millie and Jared. How he doesn't tell her things that concern the pack.

I know that he's concerned about her well being, and doesn't want to worry her, but by being his mate she -is- the Alpha Bitch. He should have confidence in her and let her in with what's going on. If he can't confide in his mate, then who can he confide in?

HMMMM....sex...good...

I don't understand why readers try to re-make your Alpha male characters. Please continue writing them as you picture them. This is FAN TA SEEEEE, not REAL AL LIE TEE...and if some portion of reality is identified in the characters...I hope the readers see and experience the positives as I would hate to have to really interact on a daily basis with someone with those alpha as well as feminine negatives. The glory of your writing is transporting the reader to a universe/world that may be somewhat identifiable but is totally engrossing in its description of scenes and behaviors. You do an excellent job Sensai. Keep YOUR vision of fantasy and if some portions of reality is identifiable, may it be that we learn to see and learn to act and react better in reality than some made up CHARACTERS..... FANTASY people...it's what LITEROTICA is all about. Peep THAT!!!

I have really like reading your stories.........I have been trying this time to read them in time order instead of as listed...............

yum

Hi just to let you know that on page 2 after Aaron goes nuts the doctor wants to check his wounds. You say to check he hasn't 'exasperated' them but I think the word should actually be 'exacerbated'

Sorry to be picky!