by Rabdog
Your way of speech nor your sentence structure....
A reader is not supposed to be confused from the get go.
Please speak with a few editors and look at the pages that they give you on help with points of view and writing from different perspectives.
Sadly I won't be following this story it was just painful to read. You definitely need a editor. .
I don't get the theta ignoring orders from his alpha or that being allowed.
I have to agree with the previous. This needs editing badly. Painful to read is a very accurate description.