All Comments on 'Whiteout Ch. 01'

pretty good but short more plz

Wish it was longer with more details.

It certainly has potential; however more details would be appreciated. I’ll be looking forward to the next chapters. Hoping there not to long in coming.

AlBorland

Good start, I like this. Please write some more as soon as possible.

I think your story shows promise. I hope the next chapter comes quickly and is maybe a little longer. Either way I'll be watching for chapter 2.

Nice, I haven't read about one of these on this sight, can't wate to see what hapens...

This has the potential to be a good story. The only fault I see in it is that you ended it too abruptly.

This was a good introduction to what could become a very good story, and I look forward to reading part 2 when it is published.

If I have one little niggle, it's with your mini-synopsis. You wrote: 'Cop meets a woman during a blizzard taking shelter in an inn.'

This is a classic example of a 'misplaced modifier' - just how often do blizzards take shelter in an inn, I wonder?

Apart from that, well done - 4 *s.

Thanks for the comments every one :D, One thing about is though, you get an insanely low amount of letters to use in the summary space.

Is the storm demon commenting on her needing a strong man with himself in mind or Hunter? If she has teleporting powers then why was she worried about having to walk through the snow? :P

ohh keep going need to read more!

Love it