All Comments on 'Who Captures Who?'

The romantic connection is emphasized in this story. And I don't mind mother and son confessing their eternal love for each other. But it seems silly for them to make an exclusive commitment to each other. A mother would also want a full life for her child. She would want her child to be a father, and not necessarily the Grandmother of her own children, by getting pregnant by her son. Eighteen is fairly young to be thinking about your first child, and 43 is a little old to be thinking of having a second.

It might make for an interesting sequel, for mom to be searching for a romantic partner for her son (a possible wife), especially one who would also be open to the romantic and sexual relationship that is now so fundamental to their mother/son dynamic. What sort of woman could fill that role? And where could they find her? Would it be a young woman who was already in an incestuos relationship with her father? Would it be a bisexual colleague who has been already making sexual overtures toward mom? Would the son be open to mom's suggestions, or would he feel rejected by her for suggesting he should find someone else?

This is a good start. I think this fantasy deserves another chapter!

great job! Thanks for writing this!

A read.

Wow, That was a good read.

Great story well written. Please let there be a follow up.

The get to the room and set her on the bed... He talks to her for 5 more paragraphs telling her... get a fucking life... Plus why does he then call her mother....You ruined the mood... started with such promise... After he got all emotional and turned into a woman himself I had to stop reading

It's a good story but a little wordy. As it's just the two of them in the room, it wasn't necessary to constantly identify her by her name. There wasn't anybody else he could be talking about.

What to say? It was 'ok' at best. However though, your grammar is appalling, and it spoiled this rushed story for me. Your sentences were so fractured I had to keep re-reading pieces to fully capture your thoughts. Then there was some nonsense chit-chat from an old gentleman in the lift. Then once inside the bedroom instead of this lusty 18 year-old getting his 'rocks off' he turned into a wimp and started spouting love and devotion for his mother, or Jen!!!. Really? I dont think so. I'll admit I've read worse, but having said that, I think you do have potential. Try again with less rush, less silly gushy spoutings, and tidy up your grammar, 3 stars.

Who fucking talks like that.

I was impressed with their emotions, perhaps a bit over-the top (as they say) but I will give the author credit for feelings and it seems to me that he actually loves his mother in the manner he has created. And that she loves him in the same way, who knows?

This is a well written, sensual incestuous love story. In my mind, the adoration, respect, and passionate intimacy between mother and son represents the best of a incestuous love affair between equals who are truly self-aware and secure in their respective id and ego. 5 stars.

Too much bull shit comments I thought it was an awesome love story and you should have continued with more!!!!!!

Wonderful love story!!!