All Comments on 'Who Needs a Boyfriend Anyway?'

It was really really hot but I wish it was a longer story

good story with great sex action. my only suggestion would be to not use such similar names. it's confusing for the reader, and you yourself confused them a few times, which is distracting.

still gave you 5*s though.

keep up the good work!

If you do want to use two such similar names, I suggest doing a search-replace on one of them to something wholly different, do a proof-reading check, then switch back. That will make it easier to catch accidentally swapping the two names. I counted two such mistakes, and found that looking for more mistakes took me out of the story a bit,

Thanks for your feedback thus far. I've taken it to heart and am now editing this story to be more coherent. The edited version should be up soon. Thanks again. <3 -M

Agree with others about the name thing... also you switched focus on who the story was 'following' a few times it starts downstairs with one of them and then we are in the mind of the other.

Bit too abrupt with the conversation as it was a short story. I got dumped... oh i'm sorry... I should date girls... hey you're a girl! Isn't a very natural progression for sisters who didn't think about each other that way before. Felt like you rushed it to get to the 'hot part'

I hope there will be a part 2!