All Comments on 'Who Will Cassidy Belong To Ch. 02'

wait does it end here or is there more to this story then we know?

but you've lost me with the rape. I found it distasteful and unnecessary. Things are also moving awfully quickly. Orphaned, Met the mate, impregnated and attacked in one chapter, kidnapped, rescued and nursed back to health in another. These chapters could have been fleshed out a lot more and stretched into at least 4 chapters.

I do hope you continue writing but take the time to really know who your characters are and ensure that your readers do too. You want it to read like a book, not an outline. Thanks for sharing your work though, and good luck!

Everybody has there way of telling a story. Those who don't like to read about rape shouldn't read stories with rape in them. I actually think it brings definition to a story with something real mixed with supernatural. I don't condone rape but it does happen. Please continue Lady Aurora.

Is this the end? The story was about who Cassidy would belong to and that point has been decided. So we are left w/Cassidy finding her true mate and in the end finding the family she needed. So the story has ended?

if you continue it, i think it would be great but you could just let it end here. its nice to read a series that doesnt take me weeks to read all the chapters. i really loved it.

The story was great but honestly I as well as some others would love to read a little bit more on her life with her mate , I am sure you could create one more problem for them to run in to for your lovley readers ,but if you decide to leave it at this i am just as happy that i had the chance to read and i am looking forward to reading more stories from you

This story is AMAZING. Please write more, there has to be more to this. :D

In the first chapter he let her go back to the diner even though he knew she is his mate and in danger from the vamp. I guess that make it for you to write how the vamp capture her, but really it doesn't make sense to me. You should let her stay and let the vamp capture her at the compond. Not really like to first chapter much coz there are many things that's weird , but I kept reading and now after chapter two I will not read it anymore.

Why? Too many misstake. For one after the vamp kill two of his own he and a few wolfs are going for a hunt the evening after her attact and ask her to join? What kind of idiot act of dumbness is that? again maybe this is your ankle for you to get her capture again. But really there is better way for you to do that. The second he is toooo dumb and not care about her safety at all. To me he doesn't act like a smart alpha except the first time they met and he help he from the biker and when he kick the carnamne sake out from the compond. Other then that he is just an stupid alpha. And the third it took him two weeks to find her? How come they stop to communicate through to head? isn't it their thing? she should be talking to him the whole time the owl took her before enterring the cave. There is more but I will not drag it up.

And not to mention the whole "story" is pack into two chapter it's too rush and not believeable and....any how you write good you just need to rewrite a little bit. Make him act like a alpha that is concern about her safety. He and she are acting like they are more powerful and smarter than the vamp. Which have shown they are not, he acted like he want her to becapture or death!!

I think you should have eased into the ending more and the whole story was a bit rushed but overall it made for a great read.

Im sorry but the story was too rushed and the scenes lacked proper detail. Also, please try to work on your punuation and grammer.

Perhaps you should work on your GRAMMAR*** as well

:)

I really liked it, the fantasy feel was well laid out and I love the relationship with Cassidy and Griffon.Great ending too!

You should totally add a chapter or 2!

Story had potential but way too rushed. Big disappointment.