All Comments on 'Whose in Charge'

I only looked at this story because the first word of the title is incorrectly spelled, and wished I hadn't bothered.

Stories told in the present tense are incredibly difficult to pull off and unfortunately yours is not an easy read, either. Stilted dialogue and over-description together with typos and inappropriate apostrophes. Please consider obtaining an editor

Not bad -- not good either -- and your spelling stinks.