All Comments on 'Wife Discovers Erotic Photography'

Not a bad story. It had/has a lot of potential; at least in my opinion. The voice in which it is told is a bit distracting. It reads more like a report than a sexually charged scenario.

Not the sexiest story I've ever read but interesting and very possibly real, I can imagine a couple getting hooked on pictures of the wife, geting naughtier and sexier untill perhaps somethign else happens, but leaving it open you have the chance to carry it on as far as you want too, an interesting story and one I can relate too well done keep it up

if you can emphasise the wedding and engagement ring a bit more that's put a really sensual spin on this story.

I like this approach, incremental. Very erotic without being vulgar. Five stars.

After reading your story I sent the link to my wife. She loved it as well! Needless to say we enjoyed the inspiration! Well done!

so we use our own imagination

The dialog between hubby and wife is very stilted, artificial. People don't talk like that. Take a look at the "Writing Dialog" reference material in the Literotic library for assistance.

And you should really find a decent editor. There's a lot of repetitiveness in your narrative that could easily be excised to enhance the rhythm of the story.

Finally, this first "chapter" ends ackwardly. There's no hint of anything amiss or promise of increased eroticism - no "grabber" or "cliff hanger" to intrigue the reader and keep the interest in continuing.

Awesome, excellent story beautifully told. I really like the way the atmosphere of innocence is created and maintained.

Nice story, but I would have explored more the presence of the assistant, and what touching or other interactions took place during the session.