by John916t
It'll be better for him if he lets the motion sensor dash cam on every single day! 1*
I'm WAY tolerant of about anything on here. But that was simply so poorly written that one cannot even read & enjoy it. One of the worst I've seen.
This story is a joke and meant to be that way.You take every story like its life or death..GET A LIFE
Fuck, that was hard to read. Almost not punctuation, misused words, misspelled word, shitty sentence structure, where you could actually find a sentence. Wow.
and it went downhill from there.
You don't have the first idea of how to write in English. An absolutely pathetic attempt!
I presume he set his wife up to chest on him but it's like you were writing in a foreign language. Don't write anything again. Ever.
I'm not fucking joking.
you would not want to know or have anywhere around a child.
I don't know what language you were writing in but it wasn't English.
The most obvious example is the so-called paragraph structure. You just seemed to make them anywhere, wherever. In the middle of a sentence is one thing, but in the middle of a word? Well, that takes true stupidity.
The first three words should have been 'Kate and I' and as long as I'm commenting, the fourth word is also wrong. Please finish the fourth grade before you write another story and don't even think about sex until you're at least twenty one years old - you should be in the sixth grade by then.
Not "Me and Kate."
A grammar mistake in the first 3 words. I had a feeling it wasn't going to get any better, but I decided to give it a shot. I lasted 2 paragraphs. I'm sorry, but don't submit stories until you've had someone look them over. This was unreadable.
This is the second story I've read today that is unreadable. Like other commenters before me, I didn't last beyond the third paragraph. OK, you tried. Now that you've had some consistent feedback concerning your writing, please get an editor or study up on how to write. 1 star. Better luck next time.
Jezz, you badly need some one to proof read. It is quite obvious that even you did not reread what you wrote
Yes excellent a 5 Star Story if ever I read one
Mind you the 5 star praise is not for the actually story itself more for the hilarious attempt at grammar and spelling by the obviously 12 year old author.
Lol what a hoot, but please put this in the comedy section pal as no one can take this shit seriously without even an attempt on your part to even try to edit the story XD
Now get back to prepping the bull for your wife loser!
I can't believe this site would even post something like this. To think they used to reject stories for some minor grammar problems. This is ridiculous. Somehow this author missed the experience of an education.
I don't get a husband wanting some arse hole to fuck his wife breaking their marriage vows. If they have a problem in the marriage there are better ways of sorting it.
The writer needs a English lesson wrong word galore and poor grammar,
Couldn't follow what this fellow was saying. Not only did it not make sense in language, why would a man want someone else with an enormous dick fucking his wife? Cuckold, faggot fantasy.
Men don't like this kind of shit.
Simply, bad writing. The story idea is good but your writing is juvenile at best. Take some time and read stories by some of the best authors. Doing so will make you a better writer. Also, find someone to edit what you write. If you do this you will get better.
This had to be submitted as a joke. No one could write this.poorly on purpose.
I think you love black dick more than your wife. Stick this in interracial or home fantasies where you belong.
The special thing about this story is the use of paragraph long sentences throughout. Literally, the only periods are at the end of the paragraphs. Fascinating.