All Comments on 'Wife's Fantasy Comes True'

Please dont write stories in the "third person" form. It is much more easier for the reader to understand in the "first person" type of writing.. Plus, it is a lot HOTTER, thinking that the wife (or whomever), is actually doing what is being written..

Yes, I agree with anony below.

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This is a mess, because of the use of third person, then in the same sentence or paragraph it is in the 1st person. Get an editor, PLEASE.