All Comments on 'Willing Slave, Unwilling Master Ch. 06'

Do they still have condoms in the future? If so Dan should order a gross.

You have a very interesting imagination - are you saying Rose is Frankenstein's girlfriend, made up of other peoples parts? Well I'm still looking forward to more .

If Lower Vil are so compatible with humans, they are human, just humans with fur. If someone made a law about not getting a Lower Vil pregnant, they are human (and the government is complicit with human slavery). What are the motives of the Higher Vil? Obviously they are experimenting. To what end? Maybe to allow them to develop a virulent plague to devastate human society with on fell blow? Possible. The early hostilities were mentioned; such a blow would end the deadlock. Or something subtle, from prolonged contact with the Lower Vil - like native human sterility?

One might think Dan's friends might know of someone of wealth who also supports their anti-slavery views, and is willing to collect the evidence and protect Dan and Rose. The early abolitionists had their wealthy patrons, people of religious conviction. Dan and Rose could be the beginnings of a revolution ...

Anyway, that's were my mind is traveling. This is your story. Tell it how you will. And curious about the different ages of Rose's various systems - what does that portend? Thanks for sharing. 5*

My hypothesis is that she's been used at an organ farm. She's been sold off by bits and pieces. That's why she's unchipped, she's just there to make the "lab" money. That's why the seller wanted her back so badly. He doesn't want anyone to figure out.

Really awesome story so far. i have really enjoyed it. kind of afraid you will give this series a sad ending but still i look forward to the next one

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Looking forward for the next chapter

I'm enjoying this story, don't worry too much about the spelling as a good story can rise above that.

This has been an amazing story and I can't wait to see the rest of the story. I both can't wait for the conclusion and hope it never ends.

I was afraid you had been sold as a sex slave!

great sci fi, inter species love story, please keep it going

Looking forward to reading much more of this story.

Man I am really loving this story! Keep up the good work, but please, please let this tale have a happy ending. I'm begging you!

Such an interesting take on the slave master dynamic. Though I know I've made that comment before, it bears repeating.

Good twists going on too! I've got all kinds of nefarious and reprensible programs going on in my imagination. Looking forward to more!

but are a manmade one instead. Human and vil offspring? Clones? Can't wait to find out.

So to sum up what the vet said, her organs are fucked up, but not in a immediate life threatening way. God, I really want, no, I need, to know why. Also, if Zach is a vil, why was Dan's sister so pissed off at him at first for having sex with Rose, if she fucked her vil too.

This phrase is confusing: I wasn't happy about you not being pregnant, I had to read it a couple of times. Also it should be your not you (noun or pronoun before a gerund is in the possessive case). I am bothering because this is seriously good writing and should be published.

Amazing story bro looking forward to the new chapters

The details are starting to slide from 'Sci-Fi as a setting' into some pretty solid Sci-Fi as a story vehicle - which I'm liking btw - but now my mind is churning with even more questions!

Very much enjoying your tale, thanks :)

J

This has turned into a very unique and absorbing storyline. The writing and particularly the dialogue is exceptional making ignoring typos easy. Want to see what comes next and reading on.

Still enjoying it but this chapter gave some more details but not the excitement. Guess it will pick up later.

I honestly can't believe I haven't found this before now. What an engaging tale!

This story is making a bit more sense. The protagonist "Dan" never mentions his age, just that he is "still in school". It is appropriate that he has these ignorant brushes with idealistic euphemisms, since most growing adolescents go through the same "rebellion stage" (even if it is rebelling by copying the ideals of lesser intelligences, like teachers/indoctrinators).

Dan's inability to understand or fathom an entirely different species is the basic problem, not his difference with "slavery". He is combating his basic understanding of the universe, not slavery. He tries to get the universe to fit into his idealized bubble, when it doesn't, he lashes out (like most rigor-free, unfocused youth).

The most entertaining mistake of the entire series is in the passage involving the "breading". The actual term the author meant was probably "breeding", but imagining the slave being dipped in an egg wash and rolled in flour got my giggle. I hate to think how they heated the flour to cook it (i.e. raw milled flour can be quite difficult for humans to digest).

Will this be translated to the English language? It is close now, it would be a shame if someone didn't think to put it right, at some point.

Smokepole

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"Will this be translated to the English language?"

That's an unfair comment. But I guess when a story is good it has readers with higher standards.