All Comments on 'Winter Turns to Spring Ch. 01'

I enjoyed your story and look forward to reading more

I made it through your first paragraph when I discovered you have been married 15 years and you have an 18 year old daughter who was born four years after you got married!! You are 36 years old. So, have you been married 22 years, or was your daughter born several years before you got married?

Sorry, but I too was confused enough that I STOPPED reading after your second paragraph!

I'm certainly not a literary snob, but your timeline is so askew that I can't be bothered. Put a calendar and a calculator next to your keyboard, and start over!

As if the run-on sentences weren't enough, the inconsistencies would turn off almost any reader. The story line has promise, though. Get an editor and try again. You aren't a natural born writer, but you get a "2" for trying.