by TamLin01
I rarely give 5 stars, but your little story was excellent. :-)
Good story, excellent wordings. My only minor critiques would be establishing a clearer sense of period. I might also suggest re-working the confrontation. Brookwood has already physically harmed Herb by the time he makes it back to her home, in a very effective and visceral scene. The threat to stuff him in the oven feels a little too "storybook" by comparison. I get that you are going for a storybook effect, but I think you could afford to keep the horror factor dialed up.
Easily one of the best I've read so far this contest. Keep it up!
Your stories are wonderful -- "Wendigo" and "The King in Yellow" are two of the best stories on the site. But even if I hadn't liked the story, I'd still have given you five stars for "It helps me keeps my ghoulish figure."