All Comments on 'Within Pt. 01'

Just one very minor blot. Could you please learn the use of lay. Hen will lay eggs, you lie on the bed. It is minor but slows the reading.

I loved this. Will you please continue?

Great story, but I think you meant "etherial", not "urethral"

I loved this, can’t wait for you to write more! The idea itself was unique and the way you explained her confusion and what it was due to really added to the story. I wasn’t expecting him to be faerie either but it was a wonderful twist. My favourite part of this story was the chemistry and descriptions, thank you for writing this!

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