All Comments on 'Without a Sound Pt. 01'

I love mutual masturbation stories, and photographs, the whole subject...

I think I'd have enjoyed it more with a longer, more gradual rise in tension, for me there isn't quite enough time or teasing between the first touch and full-on masturbation. But that's just me.

Also, the first few paragraphs are a little clumsy with certain words repeated unnecessarily, which nearly stopped me from continuing, and that would've been my loss because this is a really good beginning and you can clearly write well.