All Comments on 'Without You I Have Nothing Ch. 15'

Much, much better. Right back up to the standard this story promised at the start. John B.

Nothing more to be said

Please quit writing until you have learned how to do it properley, you are not The Wanderer or LA Wicker or Sweetwitch or Danielle. They can pull of a long serial like this, you can not. Your grammar might not be too bad but your storyline is vague and confused. Your characters are straight out of a soap opera, no scratch that, some of their characters are believable. Your idea of Chinese customs are no doubt obtained from some third rate detective novel, at least try to do some research before you write.

Try attending evening classes in creative writing which is something that you need badly.

Vicky Chiu

I can only add that I have enjoyed the twists and turns, I even enjoyed the criticisms thrown at your work. Keep writing, just to annoy the critics and more especially to entertain your fans!

You almost lost me a couple of chapters back - waaay over the top. Now it's back to a fun story. Well done and thank you.

This is a good story and I look for another each day. Keep up the good work. Thanks for sharing your talents.

This is the worst story I've read in a long, long time....

I have read this story from the start. I am really enjoying it and cannot believe that people cannot suspend reality for a good story. My ownly critism is more then one a day, no don't waiting for the next installment is definitely part of the enjoyment. Thank you for a very good read.

...that the foremost thing missing for me in this story is reality or realism, but quality. in my opinion the setting of the story or the plot can be as unrealistic as it wants (eg i love fantasy and science fiction!) but the emotions of the characters should come across as real and plausible. sadly, this story has the worst characterisation i've ever seen. jennifer and peter have the intelligence of plastic dolls, they have mood changes every 5 minutes and they behave in a way that reminds me of 4 year old children...

This series was fun to use in our Creative Writing course as an example of how not to write, it was the first time this year that we had a unanimous critique. The score was:

Setting 0

Point of view 0

Characters 0

Plot 0

Flashback 0

Foreshadowing 0

Denouement 0

Theme 0

It did get a score of 10 for humor, we found it hilarious

Regards from all the B. LIT‘s, we look forward to your next story

Next time Sammy X writes a story I am voting 100 for him just because his keeps his rantings to about one page, not fifteen chapters. Sammys stories are easier and more lucent too read too. You ask why I followed this from Chapter 1, it was like the army officer's review that said him men will follow him everywhere - out of a sheer morbid curiousity

This will win first prize in the Artificial Intelligence section of the RoboWar competition and is guaranteed to turn the other robots green with envy. It must be written by a robot because it is to stupid to have been written by a human

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stupid story