by MissGivings
I like it so far. Hope you make the next chapter Longer.
this is a vaguely familar story, not sure if i read something like this before or not. But its a good start.
I like it so far...though I think you cut it a little short, though it was a good place to leave us hanging. I felt maybe a little more time with the characters would have brought more people back for more.
I'll be back to see where it goes and great job!
I'm interested. I would advise longer chapters, though. With chapters of this length, you barely get to enjoy the story before it's over. Try for 2 literotica pages. Definitely keep going with it!
Hi there! Great start to the story. Hurry with the next chapter! I agree with making the chapters longer since you are detailed. Keep up the great work!
wonderful start... sounds intriguing so far.. wanna know what will happen next ..hope you add lots more soon..
This is such a brill start!! please get crackin on chapter 2 soon, the wait is killin me!!
A great start, i hope to read more from you. and the Alpha sounds yumy... lucky lisette
You've caught my attention. :) This is a great start. Nice discriptions, personalities are showing a bit. Interesting that there was a newspaper ad when they didn't post it themselves. I'm intrigued and want to know more! :) Great Job
awesome beginning. I definitely look forward to reading more soon.
a little bit short as far as a first chapter...hoped for more to develop to catch attention...maybe next time make a bit longer? but it has my attention...i'd like to see what will happen.
Well I like it so far, it looks promising. Hope you continue to write this one, as was already said it is a little on the short side but that can be forgiven for a first post. Its hard to get your head around how many words will make up one of the pages here.
Keep up the good work will be keeping an eye out for your next chapter.
Off to a smashing start. Ya just can't beat the imagery of six tall hotties in one room no matter how you slice it.Looking forward to more.
Hmmm...you mispelt them you put a "n" instead of a "m"...anyways...hope to see more from you...thanks