All Comments on 'Working Girl'

Another well written and thoughtful story.

Articulate, well written, sad, and not very erotic.....all in all, a real downer. Pass the antidepressants and the Viagra. My little captain's head is down.

it was agood read. keep it up.

well written but just goes to show you that the government is no help and with all the money theywaste on shit that we shouldnt have to waste it on either ... the money we waste on a war we shouldnt be in would cover many such cases ...george please help

Sad but well written story. Keep up the good work. I enjoyed what you have written, its bad when life has to come tothat

You could have made this longer by examining her emotions more. Her feelings about Dan are just lightly dabbed in. The actual sexual encounter could have been more fully developed.

Nothing glamorous, but this is why so many of ladies get in the business. The first time is always the hardest, but even after many times, it is still gut wrenching - a hard way to make a living.

pretty well writen and erotic, but a bit of a downer. realistic too. If this is just the set-up for future works and she embraces the lifestyle, then the future stories should be good. Keep writing.

So where are those self-righteous pontificating moralists that slam every story about the cheating wife? Not so easy to shovel their shit under the circumstances set up by magmaman.

A tough story with the loving wife trapped in a corner; she strikes out in desperation. It would be nice if there could be a follow-up story to further flesh-out this story. Where will her love for her husband (and her desperation) take her? Will the downward spiral continue, will she get busted, will they get rescued by a magnanimous sugar daddy (not in this universe)?

Tough decisions; tough choices.

Very much a "It could happen" story with just as much information and emotions as fit the story. You respected the characters. You didn't linger or belabor the circumstance or her actions.

Nor did you or should you extend the story for tittilation purposes. It was gripping in it's own right as a stand alone.

with high Regard

This the most sensitive and realistic stories that I have read in a long while. I thing that you are a fantastic writer. I hope that you never lose your sensitivity.

She spends a lot of time justifying why she was cheating. There are of course other possibilities than becoming a hooker, however the story is interesting because she is supposedly so innocent. Let's see where it gets you...

Good story. I hope you'll follow up on it.

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I agree with LeBroz: where are the louts who slam every cheating wife story with their foul invective? Queue up, fellas, and tell us again what a cheating slut this woman is.

Poignant, sad, well developed, well written sad tale. You are an amazing writer, hoping to read more tales from you.

...the best wife tale I have read here. I felt so sorry for her...and him. Maybe I am just an old softy. There were no villains or wimps here, just two people slammed by bad luck. I can only wonder and shudder as she progresses through her life as a harlot. Skipping the condoms was a serious mistake, but understandable with her nervousness. I got little entertainment from this story but there are some like that. Thanks for your insight. BTW I gave it a '5'. Jim

If I didn't want to slit my wrists before this story makes me think more towards that end. Luckily I'm too smart for that. Can a couple's situation get much worse than this? On to ch. 2. We'll see...

might as well multi task with perks, . TK U MLJ LV

THE GIRLS SHOULDNT COMPLAIN......FOR WHATS THE USE.....THEY HAVE 1/2 THE FUN......AND ALL THE JUICE, tk u mlj lv nv

And her judgement is so faulty - but she is not alone I fear -

and sometimes you just have to do what you have to do...poor girl is in a bad situation with a cripple to look after...the only way to make money is use her body...she will become a good hooker in time unless the first guy got her pregnant then she will be well and truly fucked.....at the end of the day she is just anothe fuck slut skank whore....

Very authentic. Five stars.

I guess some women enjoy being in' the life ' , but in my mind this is a credible reason why a good woman would start. No sequel wanted here despite this being skillfully and succinctly written.

A continuation would likely have narrator dabbling with drugs to numb up for her dates. That's when a fast slide listen begins & only sadists want to know about that. Full marks.

Great story. Reads very authentic.

Life can be tough.....

Short and to the point, Well Done,

Call it what it is, she's a whore. There is no excuse for stooping this low.

Good story told well, but I don't think I want to read it again. It's just too sad. Thanks for sharing that.

Good story for a way to sad life.

It turns out that I did read it again. There are so many stories here about a wife whose fantasy is to become and escort. This story puts the truth to the lie that it is glamorous. Well done. It's not a fun read, but it is realistic.

Excellent story line, enjoyed both 1 & 2

Thanks for your writing,