All Comments on 'Wrong Pt. 03'

Excellent story and thank you for not turning it into an episode from Jerry Springer. Shows what can happen when mature people let a situation be what it is and live with their decisions. Not saying it's always easy to do, but sometimes when you stand by whats best for you, it does work out. Well done

is the very best writer contributing to Literotica or only one of the very best, but she never yet has disappointed with a story that is less than wonderful.

Not a line of dialogue not right...the chronological shift perfect. The sex, as much of it as there was, was superb.

I never did warm to Patrick, but GITM somehow convinced me that he was okay for Nina (No, not okay, Right for her), that the whole family situation was now a healthy situation.

It is the best testament to GITM's art that I can offer that I feel good as the story reaches its conclusion. For too many Lit authors, romanticism is a weakness, for Girlinthe moon it is a strength.

what's loving is don't wanna be right, TK U MLJ LV NV

the original story had the sisters as the best of friends at the end, which I found to be very unrealistic.

This ending fits much better with real life in my opinion.

everyone. Means a lot.

And to last Anon, no. The sisters never became friends. It happened almost exactly this way. I'm glad you felt it was realistic; I always strive for that!

I Love this story. It was saved as one of my "Best of Literotica" stories until I could no longer find it. Sounds crazy but it was so good I would periodically reread the story. The ending is much more realistic and the sex is still HOT!

Please keep writing new stories. You are one of Literotica's best authors!

Another well conceived emotional roller coaster!

The family angst was realistic. I could feel the tendrils tearing as Nina struggled to reconcile herself. Patrick was a tough read. Honestly I have trouble figuring him out. His logic before the divorce was flawed. Yet he admitted all to Nina he screwed up. It was so boggling yet so good.

Chloe marrying so quick surprised me. Yet it made sense. Patrick and Nina not moving in together until much later surprised me, yet it made sense.

I had wondered about Patrick's family a bit and reread two. Powerful in perspective.

You even allowed us a glimpse into their future as the family rebuild begins.

GIM you weave such a complex emotional tapestry. Designed beautifully, so very very intricate.

I sound like a broken record, but your skills are amazing.

Thank you,.

M1*****

I loved this story but kinda hated it at the same time, too.

I think Patrick irked me the most - he hurted Chloe SO much and didn't really seemed to give a fuck. I mean... how do you marry because it's "convenient"? I mean, what kind of man lies to his partner for 6+ years? I don't know, I felt so sad for Chloe reading this story. & I didn't really care that much for Nina.

I liked your portrayal of Chloe... she's a good sister.

Lord knows Nina would never ever heard a word from me again if I was Chloe so... she appeared mature and grown.

Aaaaand... I must say I felt like Chloe didn't find true love. I feel like Chloe's love with Greg wasn't as strong and "right" as that love of Nina & Patrick.

ALSO, it irked me how Patrick said Chloe didn't even know him enough to really love him when he spent 6 years with her but he LOVED Nina from seeing her a few times?

I think the thing that bothered me the most... I had a feeling like Chloe's new relationship was described as something less worthy than the one of Nina & Patrick. I felt kinda sad because she was really so wronged by Patrick and I felt like she at least deserved some form of justice.

But anyways, nice work! Very realistic.

I didn't like Patrick, because he was an abuser IMHO.

He lied to Chloe for 7 years, masquearding around as someone who loves her while carrying around hurt from not having Nina. & while I understand it, I can't believe Nina got over his past just like that. It's not just about Chloe, but Patrick (from his actions) isn't someone good. i feel like you portrayed his abuse as spmethong trivial and almost romantic and that was very troubling for me. he was emotionally unstable for chloe and used her to 'cure' that hole in his heart. sad.

Awesome writing. I totally got involved in the story and read all the chapters and pages twice! I loved the way Nina and Patrick connected, and didnt care much for Chloe to be honest. The way you brought about the sexual energy between Patrick and Nina just made me melt! Please keep writing LOTS of more stories!

I hated Patrick, but you seem to be drawn to portraying your male characters (especially the love interests) as asshats. I guess he's supposed to be the lovable rogue. He just came off as a self centered jerk, bent on getting what he wanted no matter the fall out.

I loved Patrick. Prince Charming doesn't exist. It takes a lot of courage to be selfish in a world where 'playing nice with others' is drilled into your head from day one. Good for him, going for what he wanted when he finally had the chance.

One thing I do wish though, was for Nina to have been more *special*. It's sweet and wonderful that the third-wheel (of Patrick and Chloe's relationship) gets a happy ending, but what exactly about her attracted the infatuation of a guy so self-centered he thinks the universe revolves around his naval?

All in all though, no complaints. At the end of the day, we're all Ninas waiting for our Gregs and secretly hoping for our Patricks. Great read, I loved it.

STANDING OVATION!!!!!

So, I've read your story like, I don't know, seven times and finally decided to just say this is probably my favorite on this site. I love the emotion and I love the somewhat happy ending.

I'm kind of overwhelmed by this story. It was a very interesting read. I kept thinking the whole way thru..."but how could you do that to your sister?!" I know it happens in real life, but I can't imagine choosing a man that I'd only been seeing for 2 weeks over my entire family. It was well written. Thank you.

Two selfish, self-absorbed people who don't give a rip how their behavior affects others. They were made for each other.

i found myself being drawn to this particular story & after the very first paragraph of the first part, i knew why - this is MY story. once upon a time i was a Nina (we ALSO share a name!), my husband was a Patrick. i also have a sister who was a Chloe. our situation was a bit lighter because my sister & her then boyfriend (& my now husband) weren't married - they were in a long term relationship. the connection between us was always there but we never acted on it, until one day... we just couldn't fight it anymore. our story was always a story that i was somewhat ashamed of & i always back out of "how did you meet?" questions and conversations but this story gave me a weird feeling of... peace? i can save it and read it over and over again... the emotions & events & the backlash remind me of everything me and my husband went through. i also love the realistic ending - the relationship cannot ever be the same BUT... i will say that i will stop trying to move the relationship i have with my sister today... from cordial & businesslike to a friendship even stronger than before. that's actually my only complaint about this story - i didn't "feel" Nina grovel enough or try hard enough to reach Chloe. in the end, it seems like Chloe was, once again, reaching out first for someone who essentially did her wrong. thank you for this story.

The last line says it all. And deep down Nina knows it. IMO. It sums up the reality of their relationship.

And Speaking about reality, I'm sadly surprised at the level of despondency revealed , in some of the comments, regarding relationships. It seems that we have almost accepted that people like Greg are the stuff of fairytales. And we are literally attracting all the Patrick's into the world.:-)

The comment @ Baby_Malena is a case in point.

It's not about morality but the easy acceptance of the hopelessness of it all.

Anyway, that's too much preaching, for one time. :-)

I blame it all on your writing skills. It arises a thousand emotions.

5 stars, that keep glowing from within.

I've read this series 3 times, but I think I prefer the former conclusion, the one before the revisions.

I liked the story but i feel like it was missing something

User loveoverlust misinterpreted my comment. Guys like Greg aren't the stuff of fairytales, they're the ho-hum average joe most girls wind up with, along with their picket fences and 2.5 children and their dog/cat. Factory-standard doting husband. Give me a Patrick any day, excitement is important and settling for the Gregs of the world is always second-best.

I want more. What happened a year after they moved in together? More please. Thank you

My apologies to GirlInTheMoon for this comment is not about her story.

I am ever amused by some females longing for the bad boy. Must be thrilling those visits to the emergency room, the domestic distubance visits by the police. Oh the joy of divorce court when he abandons them and their children...he beig the one that filed finding his soul mate with one of the myriad females in search of your bad boy. I am certain he made sure you felt excited on his boys nights out.

What's that? His alimony and support payments are five months in arrears. Hell girl don't you know he has expenses. You think excitement is free.

Have at it honey until the roller coaster ride ends

Thank you for this story. I really enjoyed it. Unconventional love story but "sweet" all the same. (Unlike you, I have problems with finding the right words, so sweet has to suffice)

It is perfect as it is but there's no harm in hoping there'll be a chapter 4.

I’ve read all the comments and it’s funny to me that girlinthemoon responds bck to one comment explaining how “the sisters never becomes friends and that it happened exactly this way.” After reading it, I wonder if the girlinthemoon is writing bout her own experience. And if that’s the case then I hope u disregard what people wrote about not liking Patrick or about how Nina didn’t grovel enough to Chloe or how cld a sister do that to her own sister. To me these thoughts never crossed my mind. All I kept thinking was that I’m glad to c that Nina finally let herself b happy with sumone who loved her and that Chloe has finally found sumone to make her happy. Also I feel like it must have been a little weight off Nina shoulders when she found out Chloe was getting married again. But Frm reading how Chloe acted I felt that deep down she probably wanted Patrick to leave Nina just to tell herself that she was right all along bout Patrick and that he rly didn’t love Nina. But I bet Chloe knew deep down that Patrick didn’t love her the way he did Nina. But sumtimes it’s easier to let urself believe the lies than to see the truth. If this didn’t happen to girlinthemoon then you truly write unbelievably bc in my opinion u make ur stories feel very real. But if it did happen to girlinthemoon then I’m glad u realized that life is short and u have to do wat makes urself happy even if that may hurt others. Life is so short n u don’t ever want to look bck n think what if?? Good luck to u and ur “future stories”

GITM does this kind of story better than anyone on the site. Interesting that her female characters are far more likable than the men.

Damage was done when she started seeing Patrick. No matter what she did she would always hurt her sister. But I don't why you had to do it that way. You know Chloe actually watching them have sex.

And Patrick's description of his marriage and infatuation with Nina was really unrealistic. In an otherwise brilliantly written piece.

I can't help but fall in love with the way you write.

This was amazing.

I love this author and her writings. Each of her stories have great characters, development and details. However, I always feel short changed on the endings of the stories. I always feel like there are a couple of paragraphs missing.

Seems like there were a lot more resolutions to the conflicts in this story that could have been resolved. Maybe a follow-up chapter even. Do the parents ever get over Patrick? Did Patrick's mom move closer? Did Chloe ever figure out that it all worked out for the better for her? Did Nina ever figure out that she could stop feeling guilty?

This was a clear-eyed look at the tough choices to be made when life throws a curve pitting family against one’s own desires; an irrevocable milestone that instructs lives going forward.

Nina chose desire. I hope she can find comfort in the knowledge that should Patrick find a more attractive prospect, she will get over it. Patrick was an unsavory sort to exploit Chloe in his quest for Nina. If re-incarnation is a possibility, he may come back as one of those birds picking parasites from around a rhinoceros’ butt-hole. Bon appétit.

I gave this series full marks throughout simply because I love Girlinthemoon. Her words usually ring very true. In this case, exceptionally so.