All Comments on 'X- Streams'

Keep going with this story keep going and go further

I'm not much on water sports, but I did like the mother daughter D/S

2nd half needs tightening. First part set a good foundation, but addition of sister was a distraction. Lost track of Laura. Needs some thought moving forward, perhaps another edit (structural, not grammatical) of the first part. Please continue - you have a great imagination and are a good story teller.

Fantastic story, I loved every moment of it. Is there to be a second chapter?