All Comments on 'You Don't Deserve A Good Man'

I knew it was going to be rough when the opening to the second paragraph read:

"Honey I am YOU Dad"

Sure enough, the trend continued.

I did enjoy the plot, it was different, and sadly with a bit of effort it could have been so much more.

If you can't take the time to edit, or at the very least proof read, don't bother posting. Give it to a writer and let them write it and you can consult.

Damn, so much potential.

Couldn't get past the second paragraph.

I really like the idea for this story and with a little editing this could be a really high scoring tale.

Don't let the anonymous rabble get to you, you have talent that a good editor can turn into some top rated stories.

Keep writing, I look forward to reading more of your work.

Horrible story, every father's nightmare. He should have interceded a long time ago. 4* because it was so damn depressing.

And he had her sterilized without her knowledge or consent? Try again.

And I like the fact that it was written from a different perspective. Thanks for the effort.

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It needs one.

Great plot.

The father said it all. She didn't care about herself, nor have any self-respect.

However it needed work in implementation.

I would have made it a group of women trying to bring a straying slut back into the fold. An intervention. Had the potential to be powerful.

This is a dad cursing out his daughter to her face. Honestly, if his daughter had been a 'good woman' and married the local dog catcher, do you think her dad would have had anything more to brag about compared to Brad? Not really. Sounds like she's a loser in more than just her sexual mores.

So nice try

Because you made it sound like this girl couldn't add one plus one. UGH!

and this happened. I don't know who or where, but it did and does.

Close to real life, well done story

...and right to the point. Liked it quite a lot. Wee done.

Displays a thorough lack of knowledge of any and all writing mechanics. Couldn't overlook the shitty writing.

Probably could use an editor. Not a bad story though - Dad wasn't as harsh as he could have been. Not sure which category - maybe erotic couplings better fit.

Yes, this was poorly written, but I could overlook that if the plot itself were compelling or thought-provoking in some way. I'm even willing to give this author a pass because it's his first submission, and he will only improve with time (and encouragement.)

Unfortunately, there aren't many redeeming qualities to this story. I hesitate to even call it a story, because it was simply a conversation. A conversation can be a story if it is recounted well, if it has some sort of plot, a beginning, a middle, an end, some sense of conflict or struggle, an epiphany, etc.. SOMETHING.

Sadly, this conversation included nothing of the sort. Instead, it was simply another example of a wise, all-knowing male lecturing to a stupid, spineless, one-dimensional, amoral female. It doesn't matter if its father/daughter or husband/wife. This "plot" has been repeated, ad nauseum, several times this week alone.

Yet another non-erotic essay/lecture/rant miscategorized as Loving Wives.

Honestly, this should be in non-erotic. That said, it's an interesting story. Some women, and some guys, more than deserve to hear such words. Glad to know Brad got over her, got on with his life and reached his best destiny.

A summary of a slut's life in a few words. I really feel sorry for the father.

For sharing.

I had to give this little story an extra star just because the dad made me laugh. Him telling Sherrie she is the town slut is comical. It's so funny because Sherrie don't understand why she can't keep a man and why Brad didn't want anything to do with her.

How the hell is this a "loving wives" tale? This belongs in Non Erotic -- or not on Lit at all. Please seek an editor if you write more.

I guess she grew up just like her mother. She is the daughter from hell. Time to walk the streets. Maybe she'll find her ideal pimp.

Not nice. I take it back.

Fucking skank

Because I want you to succeed!!

Very nice original story device. Not a story but a good start. Write some more and get better.

Since we give you no money for reading your stuff. We can only pay with comments.

Keep writing I'll look out for your offering as

AMerryMan

But the only 'Loving Wife' is Sherrie's Mom, and We-The-Readers never meet that particular slut!

Dad sure he a lot.more patience than I would with the slut.

Amazing. Not all men do, but neither do all mothers. It's unfortunate during our time, it is presumed mother automatically is better parent, even selfish cheaters. Time to hang the judges, lawyers, and politicians and start again.

left his toxic slut of a mother. tried to raise this girl right without beating her over the head with a 'common sense' stick. (prolly should have)

tried to set her up with a young boy her age that idolized her. still helps her out as she is now. and best of all....he got her tubes tied....so she can no longer darken doorways with the same impact.

Reading this again, pretty solid story about a daughter who takes after her mother.

Sad thing is there are so many young single women around this day and age that are very similar situations as this daughter. Too much sense of entitlement. They would rather live with controlling assholes then give a decent guy who truly cares for her a chance. Fortunately, most finally grow up. Usually, it's when they start to close on 30 years old and start asking questions of why their life is in the crapper.

It usually takes someone like this father to wake them up. Unfortunately, this daughter seems to be in the 'you can't fix stupid' category.

She demonstrates an unchecked hypergamy. She will never find mr. right for he only exist in her psyche. Hypergamy is balanced by pragmatism and that is developed through tough experience.

I rabidly support this statement "Time to hang the judges, lawyers, and politicians and start again" to an insane(😂) degree and will add all the hypocritical religious leaders as well.

The commenter who remarked on growing up had it right. You cannot necessarily judge someone by their past if they have changed that behavior in the present. Being upfront about one's past with a prospective partner, saying and demonstrating such change to that person IS growing up. A dependable and worthy spouse. Especially in a smaller community. Good parable author. I knew a man-whore version of the authors antagonists many years ago when he wrecked relationships with really good young women. Some had become good friends of mine. He drifted away when I gave him the good friend version of the father character. I remember his plight well as I navigated a sometimes fractious marriage for 30 years. I married one of the former girlfriends and he was such a fool!

Wow! Hit the nail on the head, and the nail kept on being a nail. Good story.

Ed

Give me a break