All Comments on 'Your Day'

The first thing I read is ""This really is the best view in the entire hotel" you think to yourself".

No I don't.

Then you start telling me about my breasts and my pussy. Like 90% of readers of your story, I lack a pussy. On account of being male.

So, you have immediately lost contact with most of your readers. Don't write for one person, with whom few of us can identify.

Ignore the above, great story.