All Comments on 'Your Story'

This isn't bad at all for your first attempt; I do hope you keep writing and I will look out for further chapters. This story can certainly be developed; there are many different directions it could take. Do get in touch if you need help.

A good story. It's clearly seen it's not written by some effete hack. Anyway, as for me I like restive skirts. I like the way they jib in sex like wild horses.