by ZachDocEight
You repeat yourself a lot in what happens with each lady. A little different description would be nice
I agree lots of repetition. Also, the esp thing turned me off. It is cheesy and lame. Good concept tho.
Sounds like a lovely weekend, definitely enjoyable sex scenes but seemed a little repetitious in the wording. A very well thought out and written story. I definitely look forward to reading more of your work. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.