by m_storyman_x
I have enjoyed all your stories. Your killing with the endings leaving me wanting more. rbc
I like the story very much! Hope you intend on making a few more chapters!
I actually liked the ending, but please consider adding a chapter ... or ten <;)
But with all of the People inside the Ring. They should be able to Devise a way to be released from the Ring. and have John go back and take control of his Boss.
Fantastic story, then "HUH". A first grader could have written a better ending. Was gonna give it a 5. The ending was a -2. So a 2 star rating.
I KNOW there is a Part 2 coming. You will not leave this story as is.
Was a great 5 star story until I feel you fucked it up big time with a shit ending . Disappointed to say the lest.. 3 stars only
if a little long.
one nit---it's brassiere (boob holder) not brazier (a pan used to hold hot coals, for heating or cooking)
But incomplete as he came to he still had the Ring. Considering how many are there. They should be able to help him Escape and take his Boss the Witch down.
This story begs to have at Least one more chapter to Complete it.
great story but you need to write a sequel to finish the loose ends
But what happens with Wife,Amanda,and others he has to find a way back and turn his Boss on her Ass. and get his Harem in order including the Next Door Neighbor and other friends of the Wifes.
enthralled through every twist and every conquest....awesome read M_storyman
though that whole story was pretty badass, i really really didnt like the ending. totally ruined it 4 me. otherwise it was great though, keep writing. =)
Very interesting. I wondered what his comeuppance would be (you knew there had to be one).
Very good, Storyman. I loved both this one and "Taken..." I found a few errors but nothing outrageous. You are fast becoming one of my favorites. The plots are very engaging, the characters "real" and personable and the sex is always HOT. What more can one ask for?
A great story but too long. Yes I know I'm whining. Another story that I really enjoyed.
I do believe you are becoming one of my favorite writers on this site. I love your stuff and look forward to reading plenty more.
Reminded me of the "Ring of Cronus" stories but good, very good. Always like the hot women being seduced somewhat taken in a nc/reluctant maner. More please!