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AnonymousAnonymousover 13 years ago
Hot

Mhm loved it ;)

Ps I accidentally clicked report story sorry

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago

This really is startlingly bad. You set up a scenario that outlines a politics between men and women completely different to that existing on 21st century Earth, then you come up with things like "Fit as fuck though, can't say much with a dick in her mouth." You're making no effort whatsoever to try to imagine how the society you've described might actually work, and you show zero understanding of how women think, what women want, or what women are likely to want in such a scenario. Find a different background for the story you want to write - this isn't working.

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
The only thing that would make this an amazing story

Would be a full out resistance movement and a govt/global takedown. Tons of sex, and violent eradication of their entire empire. Now that would hit all the buttons

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