by rpholt
Are you trying to kill your audience?
I have no other explanation for posting such a mind blowing story. Stunning phantasie!
I enjoyed those alien endlessly.
Thank you, and go on!
One of the best I did ever read. Many single stories in a hugh one.
This is a great story. I've written a little erotic SF myself and I thought you handled the combination of sex and aliens very well.
My only complaint would be to echo one of the previous comments about the size of the story - most people would have broken it into a shorter story and one or two sequels!
But all in all, thumbs up!
i couldn't stop reading this story. i was very surprised when i looked to see what other stories you had written only to discover this is your first submission on this site.
i hope it is the first of many. liked your aliens. loved the anatomical variations making for unusual sex scenes.
I don't have much to say, because I was left breathless, All i can say is Bravo.
This story is amazing. My partner and I love the way you combined Sci-Fi, Fantasy, and Mythology giving the story real depth. Not only a thrilling sexual experience, but an intellectually stimulating one as well. As both of us are huge Sci-Fi Fantasy fans, we would have loved this story even without the hot sexual encounters. We hope this will not be your only submission and we'd love to hear more from you soon. Thank you! ~JoBeth & Jesse
This story was awesome. Well writen, well descibed and well charactered. Highly creative, erotic, and exactly what this site is about. Thank you.
It's almost 6 AM and I've just finished this story. It's no wonder this one is at the top of the Sci-Fi section.
- No obvious mistakes in the grammer or spelling.
- Nice use of diction.
- Amazing descriptions of scenes and characters.
- Could work well as a non-erotic story too.
- Good combination of sci-fi and fantasy.
I loved you story, it had such a variety of incredible ideas. I love that this is one long story, I never read the ones broke into parts. I can't wait to read more by you, keep it up ;)
I can only say thanks. You have an amazing talent for writing, which really helps to take the story to the next level. I couldnt stop reading!! It is good that it is one long story, cuz I know it will be easy for me to find it again. Please Submit more soon!
you should write more, the ones you have so far are some of the best ive ever read
Very good. I honestly think you should show your writing to publishers
Now that was just an awesome story.
I can not explain just how hot I thought it was, so all I can do is say, thank you!!!!!!!!
And in this case they truly are. The author of this wonderful story does not appear to still be writing, and that is a true loss. If the author is still watching, please return to writing, you do so very well.
Have you ever thought of submiting your work to a publisher? This sort of para normal romance is very popular right now,and your writing is very good.
Sarah
Of all d stories i've bn reading on this site, this is d most awsome. Good job man, keep writing, i look to ur nxt work!!! ;>
I'm in agreement you should definitely publish this story its very good :) can't wait to read more of your work.
A very well done story, both Sci-FY and erotica. Like most of the comments, I just couldn't stop reading until the end. Well, okay one time I had to stop to clean up after becoming too involved in some of the sex going on in the story ;-)
Good start and ending that got us going and ended without leaving us hanging. Of course there could always be a second part because Lance is still unattached and who knows what kind of strange pussy he'll run into or fall into, whatever.
That was a great story, from start to finish. The way you put the different races in without making it strange or disturbing was amazing, and even with the different species and body types. I loved reading the sexual exploits of Lance, and the others, and would be happy to read more of those characters.
VERY well-thought-out and well-written story. Superb attention to detail and blending science with erotica and mythology. Excellent character development and intense sexual scenes and terrific dialog. Great imagination and imagery with the multiple races and species and how they interact sexually. I can't say enough good things about the story, the writing, and the attention to detail.
My heart sank however, when you decided to insert your commentary on religion. What a way to lose an audience! I suppose it's an author's "right" to make any kind of comments they like, but bring religion and your personal opinion of it into your erotic writings slaps your reader in the face.
If this were a sales pitch, I'd be saying "Yes, yes, yes, YES, yes - oh hell - no."
Great erotica is one thing, but bringing your personal opinions about religion or politics into your stories only guarantees that you're going to leave part of your audience wondering what your agenda is and why reading through a fairly long and (until nearly the end) wonderful story had to have the author get up on a soapbox to denounce people's religion or faith.
I still rated it four stars because you did excellent work. It would have been five stars had you kept your religious commentary your own dirty little secret.
More alien encounters more species possibly someone to settle down for lance or med station moves closer to the final planet of the fairies where he lives for the rest of his days with Esme, While working as an engineer and an ambassador also for Felice Maybe she wants to have a kid and Lance can give it to her While Zera can’t give that to her Or make a Dildo 2.0 So that lances seed can co-mingle with both of their seed as a third input to the new Dildo both of them can have children together at the same time
some bits are a bit awkward, like the marriage thing was out of nowhere- but overall quite fun and some clever hits