by DarkLit
I think the story might have had more of an impact if Julie had been a real bitch. Of course, maybe the point was the husband bringing her a final heartache even when he didn't mean to. I'm not sure where a sequel would go with this story. An interesting read, though.
Wow. This story should be polished up a bit and submitted to the publishers who do fantasy short story anthologies (and who pay authors for their work!).
This is one exquisite story and I really enjoyed reading it. I gave you 5-STARS. You are one hell of a writer who knows how to write a story with an outstanding plot and with excellent character development. The ending was very, very sad. Cassandra was a real bitch to make Julie suffer the pain of having her Tongue, Eyes, and womb cut out. If I had been Stephen I probably would have killed right then and there. Retired Army NCO
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Truly, that story is deserving of being published. That was the best story I have read all week. Bravo!
With some editing I think this story could be entered into mainstream science fiction short story publications.
...on the web, intrigue and frightfulness building to a well-premised climax great work indeed.
Little else to say, I feel it's all been said before from the other comments left. You write quite exquisitely, and manage easily to draw your reader in right until the climax at the end.
Amazing story, totally forgot I was even reading this on Literotica! I couldn't stop until I finished the whole story. Great ending. And I can only hope that there will be a sequel... PLEASE!!!!
Very nice story. I was reading this on night shift and actually stayed past quiting time to finish it!
Very good :) perhaps annotther one where stephen returns to cassandra.? :p give it a happen ending where they end up togetther
I loved the ending! the climax of the story held you on edge! AWESOME STORY!
great little story, slightly predictable end though but very good nonetheless
This was an amazing story! I loved it. Can't wait to read more of your work. Thanks for sharing.
That is the most creative and original story that I have ever read on Literotica and trust me, there have been many. I do hope I get to find the finish to the story soon.
This was well written, well thought out and entirely too hard to walk away from. I loved the story and the ending. If it had ended any other way, it would have missed that final hurrah that it needed. Great job. I'll be looking for more of your work.
now that was AWESOME
great job! very chilling. it reminds me of a stephen king novel.
Loved it. Couldn't stop reading until finished at 3am. A sequel would be great if you are up to it. Thanks.
I dont' read scary stories, and i will never read one again. That gave me the chills.
Great story! Love to see this segue into a series, in fact. Or, if not, that's fine too - you did a heck of a fine job with it.