by JewelTran
I enjoy how you are writing about two people with deep feelings and hurts. It makes them seem more real life than most of the fiction writing on this site. These are real relationships being built. I have enjoyed all of our writings on this site. Please keep them coming!!!!!!!!!!!
Thrilled to see part 2. Meant to give a rating of 100 for part 1, but was so excited after reading a great chapter!
However, Luke needs to look at his thesaurus to check out 'jugular' and 'gist'.
From another Jewel
Love the way the story is going. Keep up the great work.
Orion
I was so disappointed to finish though! Can hardly wait to read more. VERY interesting characters and their backgrounds are great.
I love your writing and always look forward to new pieces appearing. Can't wait for the next installment, and many more of them hopefully.
This is very good and very well written. It is disappointing some people are critical because "there is not enough sex".I suspect that it is not only their criticism which is premature!!
Well written, wonderful plot, characters with depth; it's a cut above the majority of those submitted here. I don't know what people are complaining about.
Keep up the good work!
With your storytelling. I look forward to more of your work when I can find time. I must go back to bed to let my wife know how much she is loved now. Bye
jest vs gist, wondered vs wandered, quiet vs quite, etc.