All Comments on 'Velma'

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...very nice!

Blame it on my mood, but I just fell in love with this soft and tender story of yours... You just misspicked the Topic... that's pure romance to me.

Hope to read more of this kind

Your development of the story caught me by surprise. I had anticipated BDSM but received a beautiful love story. Paris totally surprised me and it was marvelous.

Great story. While the sex was minimal, it was done very very nicely. I felt like I was reading the story of someone's life instead of a porn story. That is a compliment. You story is very well put together, and the visuals you use to bring the town to life are perfect. You have a great writing style and I look forward to reading more of your works.

Fantastic story, love how it built up from beginning to end! Very well written, would love to read more like it!

Like one of the commentators below I was slightly surprised by the placement of this story. However, be it anal, lesbian, or romance it seems to encompass all three. <br>

If you took away the sexual elements of the story and made Paris a young man you would have an "American Dream", poor kid rescued from destitution by rich benefactor kind of story. And that would be verging on the sickly sentimental that Hollywood teen-flicks seem to enjoy wallowing in.<br>

But no, skilfully you avoided that trap and treated us to well written sympatheticly handled story of young love growing from the "across the tracks" divide. All be it one with a good handful of spice thrown in for good measure.<br>

My only complaint is that it was not long enough. You could have made more of you secondary characters and painted an even fuller picture than you did - I'm only saying because I didn't want the story to end!<br>

Very well done indeed, I look forward to more from you.<br>

TD

I can't even begin to tell you how much joy this story brought to my heart. It has been a long time since I've read a story were, in reading the story, the sex became secondary and the pleasure came from the reading. Please keep on writing; write many more stories were the warmth of love shines so clearly through!

Really impressed by that.

I don't think I need to say anything else, except that this was definitely placed in the wrong catagory. That's pure romance!

as classy, as classic as "if she could just hold on another thirty or forty minutes she could pull the night around her" I was in for the ride. Bridge of Sighs? Nothing schmaltzy in that song, but there was no schmaltz in the story, I mean there were anal strap-ons for fucks sake, but at no point did the tale lose its style or beauty or CLASS. Fucking brilliant writing. Erotica at its best...Mancelt.

This story is beautifully written. thank you

Very nicely written and great fun to read. The girls come alive in the telling and the blue yonder conclusion is neat and just right

great story , loved it

I love it

God, JimBob, you have ...

Okay, fuck! I loved this story from beginning to end, there was not one false note in it at all, and the musicality of the language ... JimBob, you've captured these two girls in your words. I love them, I loved reading about them, discovering each other, loving each other.

It was so, so sweet! Thank you for writing this story.

It was beautiful.

kisses,

`phfina

Awww, this was a sweet story..

Pretty good story, the whole sunrise sunset motif was very clever. I felt that Paris' motivations were a little unclear, but other than that solid story

This was a really awesome read - romantic, sweet, with just a delightful sprinkle of kink. Thank you for sharing it with us!

A nice & warm lesbian romance. Not Anal.

Thanks.

I can only echo the other commenters as they laud your work. This is the work of a mature writer who has honed his (her) craft well.

I could easily fall in love with Velma, in fact, I think I have...

I don't think I've ever read a sweeter developing lesbian story. Even my sister, a long time lesbian, enjoyed it and had tears in her eyes when she finished it. She was a little jealous of the gentle expressions of love that came with this story.

As others said, Thank You!

This was head and shoulders above most of the things I've read on Literotica. I say "most" because this is not a genre' I normally read. The teaser caught my interest because of the anal aspect. You handled the eroticism of young love delightfully and with good taste. Even your anal scenes were fun. I'll read more of your work as time permits.

Every time I read the best story ever, I think, wasn't the last story I read the the best ever, no it wasn't.

I really liked that you wrote this so the rich girl would find the poor and out girl. Thank you for sharing this with us!

well beyond ordinary fare, tender and hard, sweet and dirty, throughly recognizablem believable in a short - erotic build. Boom Anal the way it should be lived, naturally as rain.

....that you are the best writer on Lit. *****

I’m probably biased because I’m a lesbian anal slut like Paris and Velma but this is one of the few lesbian sex stories that actually turns me on. I’d love to see more of this story

I think this could of used a good proof-reading. I kept having to go back and reread lines because I felt like I missed something. I liked the characters a lot and I ended the story wanting more. Thank you.

Lovely characters, sex raunchy and romantic at the same time, feelgood story...

Nothing to complain about, "uncle" Bob

Hey, look up "lurker" in the dictionary? That's my picture, right there. I've read a lot of stories on this site over the years, I've commented on a few, a very few, but I have never rated any. Until now. Made me cry, ya bastard! Five stars.

Brilliant story. Certainly one of the very best. Thanks.