All Comments on 'Black Forest Rhapsody'

There's something in this that fascinates me. I like the repetition of "black forest rhapsody", though it might have happened a few too many times.

With that repetition, the repeating color line seemed to become ineffectual to me. As I wondered why, I realized that it felt like you were continuing to tell about the colors, without showing them to me... yet, there are wonderful desrciptions of your discovery of those colors thoughout the poem.

What if you dropped that refrain: "Black, green, blue, and purple And every shade in between", and took us through those colors, one at a time?

I think the balance of the repetition would be more effective, and poem much stronger.

Thanks for writing something that makes me review my own mechanics. (By the way, I love the title).

for which you can vision music, TK U MLJ LV NV