All Comments on 'Need'

I'm horny most of the time anyway but this really made me hot.

Thanks for the wet panties!

during my first pass, but didn't comment for some reason. I was a bit torn on this one. I found it very erotic, yet nicely subdued which I don't see enough of here a literotica. I do think, the poem would have more impact if you reduced by about half. I really liked what you did with this stanza:

"languid

in slow patterns

my hands learn

the symphony of you

bold one moment

retreating the next

in this opus of seduction"

I like the musical metaphor here and wish you had continued with it, working it throughout the poem. I think a focus on something like this would also help trimming to just the barest essentials of this poem.

Either way, well done.

jim : )