All Comments on '101 In the Shade Pt. 02'

That last line.....FUCKING HILARIOUS!!!

Great story, I like the way is flowed and had just enough suspense in it to keep me interested.

Much better than the first chapter. Nicely done. A follow up with the family would be nice.

While you may recognize all these things about your writing, you certainly have the opportunity that you could have made this a much more pleasant story to read and enjoy. Not talking about being "Kum ba yah" but your MC didn't have to be an asshole even when he was supposedly enjoying whatever. Why is your main character such a dickhead? Hope this isn't your internal psyche spilling, if so, pretty sad. Nobody should live all the time lke that. And it certainly doesn't provide interest to read further your gift of writing. Comes across as the Grinch.

Well written, though yes it did wander a bit. You pulled everything together in plenty of time to bring it to a concise ending

thanks for writing a very entertaining series