All Comments on 'A Friend to Watch Pt. 01'

Great start, but there really is not enough room between the seats to gobble a beautiful cock, I have given a hand job while to someone while my boyfriend fingered me and sucked on my twins. I was so exposed, so wet and exited. I got even more into it when I noticed the girl in the row ahead of me had stopped viewing the move to watch me being serviced.

The first few paragraphs are a waste. cut it down.

that's erotic literature.

A good introduction is all the better because it's not in your face.

I pity someone who needs full-on explicit action before it gets erotic.

Thank you for the feedback and the comments, I greatly appreciate them. I've been writing erotica since I was about 15, mainly as an outlet for my fantasies. Actually, how it usually happens is that I begin writing a story, any story, and at a certain point I realize I want to see my character fucking. So I let them do it.

I also liked the wind up. Puts their friendship into context. I look forward to where this story goes. Thanks.