All Comments on 'A Gentle Revenge'

Yep this is what rich men have to do for sex, rape women!!! Please, this was just poorly written garbage about rape even if she consented afterward.... Next time put in in right category....

Really, an insult to everyone in this category. Why is this here? Non-consent is where this belongs. Just straight up rape. You are one sick bastard.

What destroyed this story: 1st - why did he took his revenge on the wife too, if she was innocent? 2nd - why the need to rape her? 3rd - he wasn't an innocent man, with the dubious business and friends he had. 4th - For a claustrophobic he took his punishment as a normal person...5th - I don't understand how a rape can be a "gentle revenge". So 1*

"The Tell Tale Heart"

Not good.

neither of those 2 fit the bill. TK U MLJ LV NV

Raping the innocent wife should have forced (no pun) this story to another category. JMO.

MFH

cause I dont get a lot of this tale. Why the need for revenge? What happened to the wife and hubby?

For the love of God Montresor!

Yes for the love of God.

For those who do not read Poe, The Cask of Amontillado.

http://xroads.virginia.edu/~hyper/poe/cask.html

This was so poorly done it blows my mind. Where's the story here. ,

I would have preferred an ending where she left / disappeared with him!

Putting things in capitol letters doesn't make them emotions. Nor does it convey emotions for the characters. Your passages were stiff and the writing just didn't have any flow to it. Add to that the characters were just unlikable sods and you get this train wreck. Simply not fun to read.

1 star

Where was your wife?

Yes, there's a song about that. Wanna hear it? Here it goes...

unmarkable.

When I first heard the financial details of The Donald / Ivana Trump divorce, I decided I didn't need to worry about spats between multi-millionaires! But this tale would be disgusting DESPITE the financial aspect. The person most damaged (no, not the narrator) had done NOTHING against anyone! Females are apparently meaningless pawns to the author, to be destroyed without concern or consequence! Sweetie was not even worth letting We-The-Readers in on her fate.

2*

Gave it a try, but I couldn't finish it. Thanks for the effort, but it is only worthy of 2 stars.

Fuck me or I'll kill your husband is a pretty shitty revenge scenario.

What was the injury? What was in insult? She had only the best available to her. So what fucking what? She was already rich, so it is not like your provision was not everyday stuff for her.

A story trapping him for a couple of hours in an elevator and sharing his indiscretions with his wife would have been much better.

A different kind of revenge. Thanks.

It just stopped. .????

Very Poe-like! Yes, the wife is raped but she rapidly becomes a willing participant. Yes, the husband is kidnapped and held against his will, but...this is a revenge story! And the participants are uber-wealthy and playing for high stakes. That's what they do. Want to play for high stakes? Don't call foul. Possibly the protagonist steals wifey in the end? Perfect!

Bravo, Author! Please write more!

Thanks.

. . . And?

(Perhaps too clever by half??)

Showing your face to a man that you have imprisoned and then raped his wife, while being super wealthy??? Dead man walking is what he is.

No body no crime.

You got it wrong!! Its you whose mother should have killed at birth! God damn you, you are one retarded asshole

Did you read the story? No? Do us all a favor and move on to another site, you're becoming annoying. Come up with something more original, please.

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For me it was disjointed and not developed. 2**

Just ugh.

Based on my metrics, which have never been wrong, except one or three times, the favorite ratio for this story told everything that had to be known. 30k views and 9 favorites is pretty bad.

But the story was likewise. The plot and all that junk could have been turned into a good story, but this lacked a single line of dialogue. That didn't help. The story made me sad, like putting down the favorite family dog sad. But this was an interesting plot, but if the effort to make the parts real isn't there, they should be narrated or skipped. But they were...and nothing took their place.

Everything was pretty mediocre...the sex, the setup, and whatever else I already forgot. But the forgetting is mostly my fault.

Try again...and do it better. I don't care much how...hell, steal a story, as long as I don't already know it, and I'll be as happy as a slut in cum. I'm sorry...but it isn't my fault. The play on fear was a good element, though. It was just a bit aborted, like my first child. Please forgive me, dead foetus...and stop haunting me in my dreams, I can't bring you back to life...and I don't think I would do so for someone that would make every night a terror while not even being alive anymore.

"Imitation is the sincerest form of flattery". But poor imitations venture upon insult requiring revenge. I am not uttering a threat, but I will be avenged. I must not only punish but punish with impunity. A wrong is unredressed when retribution overtakes its redresser. It is equally unredressed when the avenger fails to make himself felt as such to him who has done the wrong. Thus, you will receive two stars and you will know I have given them.

So sod off.

Edgar

This one is not near the top of my BTB list, in fact it is a total mystery to me.

My definition of "gentle" differs.

My definition of readable differs

My definition of arrogance applies.

2*

becuase you went on & on & on about "the reason" and never said what it was that would drive a man to rape an innocent woman to get revenge on her husband

Also this isnt a LW story, id there was an actual sex scene it coulda been nonconsent

But as it is written it should have been filed under non erotic

Sadistic. Disturbing. Immature. Sorry, nothing there is appealing.

Scoring this submission as a reproduction of Poe's unique style, I give it 4****. The story is awkward and ponderous at points, just like his stories can be.

A sequel would be nice where the victim gets a knife an chops of his dick then proceeds to mutilate, but not fatally wound, the rest of his body and face so that he can live with that for the rest of his life.