All Comments on 'A Good Night'

by DaymanDuplantiere

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mdwdirectmdwdirectover 12 years ago
Amazing story-loved it!

I have a friend that I've had a similar experience with. One of the best times of my life. Keep it up!

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Constant tense changes

always ruin a story.

peebudypeebudyover 12 years ago
nice story

as if fucking your best friend isn't good enough, when she bends over and invites you to take her ass, it's a (wet) dream come true!

good work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago

Nice story, but you keep switching back and forth between present and past tense.

DaymanDuplantiereDaymanDuplantiereover 12 years agoAuthor
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Thanks everyone for your comments, I knew tense change would be a massive issue but I really rushed this one. Keep the comments coming!

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