All Comments on 'A Little Fun between Friends'

by mikethomas1179

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SomethingInTheWaySheMovesSomethingInTheWaySheMovesalmost 7 years ago
Your narration reads like instructions from Ikea. And it's a toss-up as to which one is more boring.

Blah-blah-yada-yada-blah.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 7 years ago
Never thought about it

This has to be the hardest story to follow along with.

Even though there were just 4 people in it I couldn't keep track of who is with who

The other comment is right on

It reads like a instructions for putting a piece of furniture together

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