All Comments on 'A Look. A Touch. A Breath. Ch. 02'

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Anonymousalmost 15 years ago

Good Story...

I can't wait to see what happens next. I enjoyed it very much.

PennLady almost 15 years ago

Needs work

Good start but needs some editing. There are a lot of sentence fragments that make it hard to follow what people are saying and thinking. Plus, what the heck is up with Beth? Is she bi? Is Stacey? I like this but it's kind of confusing and I think just a few tweaks would make it much easier to read.

werewolvesftw almost 15 years ago

Great so far

A bit confusing but definitely looking forward to the next chapter, write soon!

daireto over 10 years ago

Another not finished

Such a shame as it had potential

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