All Comments on 'A New Club Member'

Respectfully: When the main character's name changes from Jane to Jessica and back within the first paragraph--the same paragraph in which the other significant character is introduced as "max," rather than "Max"-- the reader is not likely to "suspend disbelief" enough to become involved with the narrative.

In the fifth paragraph "Max" all of a sudden becomes "John."

With all these errors either this effort has been rushed, or it is a copy and paste from another story.