All Comments on 'A New Life Ch. 03'

You may have a good story here, but you really need an editor. Your grammar and spelling are awful.

A reader can't go for more than a few words before it is too difficult to go on. This is mostly your grammar and word usage.

Get some help from an editor.

I think if you have someone help you with editing this and anything else you type it will be a contest winner in my eyes.