All Comments on 'A Nice Apology'

Liked the story....you need a spell checker (Shocked not Chocked) and an editor to tighten up the story

to be over 18? Very similar to my own teen phantasies.

Nice fantasy story that would be even better without the typos. Sais instead of says, etc.

A good start but you need an editor to tighten up the prose's and correct the typos but overall a good start and maybe a follow up to this would not go a miss

I suppose I should try to find an editor for part 2-4. :)

Yes, the other comments are correct about the spelling etc, but keep going. You do have talent.

....the word is SHOCK, not CHOCK. FTFY.

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