All Comments on 'A Night He Will Never Forget'

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LokiKarameikosLokiKarameikosabout 15 years ago
It could have been a lot better

With a story like this, there should have been a lot more intimacy and detail put into the first time that the husband and wife had sex together.

It was a decent story but you still have a lot of work to do if you want to be a real good writer.

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