by BlueEyed5ftAngel
nice story and the dream ending really opens alot of possibilites of maybe a real encounter.
good story I enjoyed it.
Could there be a sequel where she does turn up and asks him to give her a piercing [or three!]
I really liked it. Why the fuss that it was a dream?
Surely all fantasies are dreams. But then fantasies take imagination.
Imagination like this writer possesses. More good stories please.
Don't pay much attention to asinine anonymous critics who can't successfully spell "succeeded." The dream ending is no problem. I've written a series of three stories with dream sequences, gay, straight and bi. It is a good device. One dream sequence story that I think works well is "The Panties" posted on this site.
I personally would like to see the comments section limited to contributors only, or at least only to members with a screen name. That would keep out all the cowardly and inept "anonymous" comments that have no constructive advice.
Shale
not bad at all, plus the dream ending makes you wonder if there will be a sequal where it happens for real. i read the other comments and though they can voice their own opinion, don't think we are all like them. keep up the writing... can't wait to see what else you come up with.
I liked your story it was great and very interesting though some parts were a litte confusing. I dont agree with the person that said your story sucked. You did a great job.;)
Insulted? No one twisted your arm to read it. Looks to me like you just wanted to SEE your crappy comments in Print. Post your stories if you think you can do better than her!
I thought it was hot Angel!
I thought this was pure crap. You end with a dream sequence? That is the most cliched and cheap way to end a story. How did the cock piercing fit in with the bedding of the sister? Why was she someone he had never met before? Sad attempt.
I scored you 100 because I think the previous comment was pretty asinine & needed a counter .It's a reasonable start and maybe could develop further.
Your story was bad enough without the ending, by adding it you successed in killing a small part of me, Congratulations