All Comments on 'A Right to Rule Ch. 01'

If Evie just turned 18 two months ago, how has her mother been searching since Evie was 20? Time travel? This is way too short a beginning to be intriguing. You've said nothing about Jack to catch our attention. Really lame ...

Well this is a good start, a little short and the time-traveling (18-20-18 y o) is a little silly but I like the idea of a woman reign and this seems to be a good start to a bigger story. Please continue.

great start, can’t wait to hear more

Sometimes, stories in very short installments can be very effective.

Interesting start but very very very short ....

Evie, that wasn't a discreet look at all. If a young woman looked at me like that, it would make my day. Wait are looking for a first girl, is there such a thing

Okay anonymity needers: why do you think advert beeaks in TV shows are where rhey are? To leave the viewer wanting to watch more. Not everyone wants a 5000 word introduction piece.

Thank you. Nice work, okay yes there is a minor mistake with ages, rhe world won't end. Thought Evelyn was painted well and her reluctance to her station is interesting. I am intrigued as to what happens next and where this goes, thank you.