All Comments on 'A Secret Admirer'

I saw your comment about the Anon comment on the thread, I've only read it briefly but I noticed your change of tense a few times in the first few paragraphs. There's also a fair bit of extraneous info in there, which had my attention drifting. Some good descriptions elsewhere though. Good luck. (Delete this if you want.)

Love the idea of the secret admirer! Can't wait to read the rest of your stories.

I like your story nice simple and well written although I'm one to like stories more when it takes a little more time for them to have sex. I encourage you to keep writing you're doing great!

Where is chapter two and the rest of the story?

Where is chapter two and the rest of the story?

A sweet connection between a somewhat damaged young man and his zaftig secret admirer.

No need for the question of what comes next?, as this piece is only about the beginning.

Very well done! ~ 5+