by yukonnights
The entire storyline was enjoyable to read. A bit different from my writing style, but I could still feel the emotion being conveyed. Keep up the great work. 🌹Kant
I would have loved a chapter about Amanda & Brianna having a threeway with Jesse after getting her dressed, instead of her going onto the date. I also would love a followup with all 4 together.
I do enjoy your writing. Not every chapter was quite as engaging, but you did an admirable job of creating this fantasy world without resorting to tired cliche.
Just wanted to add my own comment thanking everyone who read this story. A special thanks for those who took the time to write a comment! It really does help to hear how others view the work, and the constructive criticism helps me on the next one.
Damn! I'm so jealous of Jesse. I wish I had girls that would be that understanding. The whole story was well written.
Thanks
Very sweet and emotional..Would have liked more details of the deflowering of the virgin but it was a great story..TY