by yukonnights
Very sweet and emotional..Would have liked more details of the deflowering of the virgin but it was a great story..TY
Damn! I'm so jealous of Jesse. I wish I had girls that would be that understanding. The whole story was well written.
Thanks
Just wanted to add my own comment thanking everyone who read this story. A special thanks for those who took the time to write a comment! It really does help to hear how others view the work, and the constructive criticism helps me on the next one.
I do enjoy your writing. Not every chapter was quite as engaging, but you did an admirable job of creating this fantasy world without resorting to tired cliche.
I would have loved a chapter about Amanda & Brianna having a threeway with Jesse after getting her dressed, instead of her going onto the date. I also would love a followup with all 4 together.
The entire storyline was enjoyable to read. A bit different from my writing style, but I could still feel the emotion being conveyed. Keep up the great work. 🌹Kant