All Comments on 'A Surprise At Home'

Very good so, please continue!

I love how expressionless and blank the ladies are in this. Super fun! Good job

....sex with a blank-faced, sexless human.

Nah! I want passion, interaction, willingness, desire!

With out that, I doubt it would be more fun than my hand.

This might be more interesting with more human elements, but with the compulsions to do anything he wants, whenever he wants.

Oh, well. Nice try. Oh, and where you didn't get rushed, retry well edited. Work on your vocabulary, sentence structure and grammar as part of and a discipline of the overall writing process. Do so and those niggling little issues that do creep in, should go away, caught and corrected the editorial effort.

Love the work. Keep it up

Just get to the sex

Seemed to have some confusion early on names, gf was called Angela a couple of times. Other than, ok story, but having the women with some emotions would've been better (IMO)